It's a kind of poem, or? Man, I like your literary ejaculations

--------'------'-------- '
a--- I remember him,
------'---------'--------'
b--- yea, he was shit,
---------'---------'--------
b--- or was that shit?
-----------'----------'--------'
a--- Yea, I remember him.

c--- I forgot, I'm old, uknow.

(<--final verse doens't have to fit to the rest, it's just the conclusion)

Seems that stressed and unstressed syllablea are random...space to improve, rest looks good to me.

i notice sub and wax follow each other round and talk grammer, like grammer whores

Literary ejaculations ...fantastic sub what a great expression

I do like poetry but, as much as my 'shit' post was just sentence 'structure butcher'... I do like the fact you see some beauty in the, hmm "grammar whoring" (sounds sort of cool dark, thought I cant decide_the way its meant )

re stressed/unstressed syllables ( though like i said i make no intention to poetic structure.. AND I know you are just messing with me , which is cool ) Check out this guy

this is my favourite poem by him

my mind is
a big hunk of irrevocable nothing which touch and
taste and smell and hearing and sight keep hitting and
chipping with sharp fatal tools
in an agony of sensual chisels i perform squirms of
chrome and execute strides of cobalt
nevertheless i
feel that i cleverly am being altered that i slightly am
becoming something a little different, in fact
myself
Hereupon helpless i utter lilac shrieks and scarlet
bellowings.

ee cummings

this is probably his most famous

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one
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iness

e.e. cummings

...and I cant help but totally love your phrase literary ejaculations and the fact the only poet I really like is called ee cummings

ok...wb twisted :roll: